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Bella's younger sister-part 1 by ~BloddyRosePettles:iconBloddyRosePettles:



Bella's younger sister
(A twilight story)


<img src="http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee186/Ukana_uchiha/VaMPiReSS.jpg" border="0" alt="dragon girl">(Yes including the wings, but she covers them with a jacket)
Name: Kathleen Swan (aka: Kat)
Age: 15
Clothes: what's in the picture, except she has a black jacket on also.
Past: Kathleen went to a boarding school when she was 8. There she found her powers, which are dragon abilities. It turns out that the boarding school was to help kids with special abilities to cope around people without these abilities. And now that she's 15, she's being sent back to her father.
Personality: shy and quiet, sarcastic, super hyper if given sugar, cold to people she doesn't like, hyper when around people she knows.
Hobbies: finding anything she can about vampires (exactly like me), drawing, writing (mostly about vampires, with the exception of some wolfy things), and reading.
Extra: Edward can't read her mind.

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*~story start~*
The night air was chilled as I headed towards home in my fathers car. It just happened to be winter, and that's not very good for me. What I mean by that is my wings; it's not good for them, or me. No one outside of the school knew of my powers, not even my own father. I don't usually keep things from him, but this was an exception; if he found out, he'd probably think of me as a freak!
So on the way, it was quiet, not that it bothered me. I was an unusually quiet person, who could blame me? People thought of me as a freak from what I liked, so I don't talk about anything. I speak in class, but that's a different thing. And with me being a quiet person, it would be harder for me when I got to the school. It was a good thing that I had an older sister to help me out.
It's been a couple of years since I last saw Bella. I mean we write to each other and all, but it's just not the same. But now that I was done at the boarding school, I would be living with her. We're more like friends, me and Bella. There's none of that fighting you usually see between siblings; we treat each other like best friends. I couldn't wait to see her again; dad hadn't told her that I was coming home yet, I told him not to, I got to be the evil younger sister sometimes.
I looked out the window to see wonderful green colors and the soft splatters of rain hitting the ground. With my eyes more sharp now, I could focus them better on different areas. I looked into a tree to see a squirrel running around with some peanuts in its mouth, also an owl looking curiously around. Must be a new owl, I thought while looking in front of us as we pulled into the driveway.
"Well, er, we're home." Dad said nervously, not sure if I would like seeing the house again.
"Home," I repeated and walked to the door. I grabbed the doorknob and twisted it. The door opened and I walked in. the living room was as I remember, maybe a couple extra stuff here and there, but mostly the same.
"I'm guessing you remember where your room is at." Dad was carrying my stuff I left in the car. "Oops, sorry dad!!! I'll take these." I said while grabbing my bags, my LARGE bags I should say. "I'll be up stairs if I'm needed!!" I shouted while running up the steps, two at a time.
I ran to the bedroom door and knocked. I heard Bella from the inside say coming. I heard a few footsteps and then… BOOM!!! If I was an anime character I would of sweat dropped. There was an ow, then the door opened.
"*gasps* My god!!! Kat!!! I didn't know you were coming!!! Dad never told me!!" Bella yelled as she squeezed me in a bone crushing hug.
I smiled and pushed her off carefully. "I told dad not to tell you." I said simply and stared around the room. "I swear I just saw something." I mumbled.
"What?" Bella asked me. She looked at me as I sniffed the air. "Hmmm? Oh nothing, nothing at all." I answered. There's definitely someone here, I thought while looking around.
I set my stuff on the extra bed. "It's great to be home." I said while looking out the window. I went to the window and opened it, stuck my head out, then let the soft sprinkle of rain drizzle onto my face. I then pulled my head back inside after taking a deep breath in of the fresh air. It was absolutely beautiful.
"I was starting to get annoyed with all the dry and dusty air that seemed to stay in one spot all the time." I stuck my tongue out after saying that. It was kinda weird for a dragon to not like somewhere hot, but I'd rather be where there's a lot of green and forests.
"That's different." Bella said with a laugh. Then she asked, "So what do you like now?" she was looking at me with interested eyes.
"Same thing I've always," I answered with a smile, "vampires." My smile grew wider as I looked at her face, her eyes went wide and then she smiled a bit. "Have you been writing lately?" she asked, looking to see if I had. I smiled as I pulled out my notebooks (there's a lot). I opened one and Bella asked what it was about.
"Well, it's about a teenage girl that meets this really cute vampire. She loves so much but doesn't want him hurt, and she knows that if she's with him he'll get hurt because her older brothers a vampire slayer. But when her older brother finds out, he goes after the vampire, and just as he shoots a bullet, his sister jumps in front to save the vampire, and that's as far as I am." I said, out of breath after words.
©2008-2009 ~BloddyRosePettles
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ok, this is the first part in my fan-fiction. i'll also be posting this on quizilla. tell me what you think!!!

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:iconblakmoon-bl:
i love it so far!!!!!!!!!!! cant wait to read more!

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thanks!! i've had to read alot of the book again though.

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thats a good thing though! anything that gives you an excuse to read those books is good!!! :clap: :D

(sorry big fan of the books) =P

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i am to!! that's the whole reason i wrote this, i'm glad you like it. sorry i haven't got the chance to put anymore on yet. i have school.

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love it:):):):)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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thanks, sorry i haven't updated:cries:

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ANY TIME
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Word of advice...don't post it on Quizilla. If you want my honest opinion on what I think, I think its a cute idea, but in all honesty, really? Okay first off, a dragon? Bella isn't a dragon and I doubt that her family would be any relation to a dragon.

Secondly, the wings are to much, the fact that she's a dragon at all is annoying, and the fact that Edward can't read her mind. Really? Are you kidding me? Lammmmmeeeee.

Noone really cares in real life if someone has an obsession with vampires in the occult by the way, now if she's in a group of bible thumpers than they may get a little agitated but thats just them, their weird that way. Her little ministory about the girl and the vampire was poorly written, it sounds like a ten year old wrote it. Oh and does the fact that she gets hyper off sugar have to do with ANYTHING or was that a pathetic attempt at making her more lovable because it backfired.

Your a good writer and your writing style and format kept me reading but those problems addressed above lead me to not enjoy your story and you have potential to be a good writer so I'm being painfully honest with you right now. I'm sorry if your upset by it but I couldn't let a person with potential go on writing badly. I hope this helps.

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